I told you on AIM what lines did it for me. They reminded me of a scene from Joel Rosenberg's Guardians of the Flame series in that they captured the same down to earth, we're doing this first because this is more important than the more personal thing we have the impulse to do first.

And I love that you kept Huffer as a complainer but didn't turn him into a wimp or a crybaby, particularly about ending up dead.

Very nicely realized vision of the effects of the battle outside Autobot City as well.